Some More Pitch Critiques

Jessica Faust at Bookends has completed the tenth round of pitch critiques. There were several good pitches in this group. The remaining pitches tended to have the same problem: trying to fit too much information into the pitch.

To summarize what we've learned so far: A pitch is not a synopsis. In a pitch, focus on two or three plot points that capture the main conflict and that illustrate your story's unique points. Don't throw a lot of character names into the pitch even if the character is an important one in the story. Pretty much stick with naming the protagonist and antagonist, or even just the protagonist, in your pitch.